Human activities have negative effects on the plant and animal species. Some people think it is too late to do anything about this problem. Others believe that effective measures can be taken to improve this question. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Some people
thinks
the ecosystem may be Change the verb form
think
adverse
than before Correct quantifier usage
more adverse
due to
industrial development. The others think opposite
and hope to restore the Correct article usage
the opposite
enviromential
. Both sides of points of view Correct your spelling
environment
is
discussed in the following passage.
First of all, the Change the verb form
are
enviroment
we live Correct your spelling
environment
on
earth including all Change preposition
in on
livings
, species Fix the agreement mistake
living
in
Change preposition
of
animals
and plants are suffering to
pollution. Change preposition
from
Human
Fix the agreement mistake
Humans
made
a vast amount of Wrong verb form
make
watse
gas and water for our living Correct your spelling
waste
water
such
as driving a car, making a
Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
cloths
and constructing a home. All these activities produce much of the pollutants Correct your spelling
clothes
such
as carbon dioxide, toxic gas and waste water
with heavy metals. If living Correct your spelling
wastewater
animals
absorbs
these toxic Change the verb form
absorb
materals
, Correct your spelling
materials
it
can be passed to the next Correct pronoun usage
they
dominent
in the Correct your spelling
dominant
live
cycle. Replace the word
life
Finally
, we all have to intake porsioned
food. That would not be reversed.
Correct your spelling
portioned
poisoned
On the other hand
, many peolple
were willing to take a Correct your spelling
people
precationary
measure to stop the pollutant Correct your spelling
precautionary
emit
from our human activities. As in the international carbon reduction agreement signed by many Wrong verb form
emitted
counties
Correct your spelling
countries
such
as England, USA and Canada. They want to reduce the
carbon Correct article usage
apply
emission
in order to Fix the agreement mistake
emissions
mitogate
the speed of green Correct your spelling
mitigate
house
effect. That can Correct your spelling
greenhouse
be greatly descend
the trend which Change the verb form
greatly descend
lead
to sea water level uprising. Many species on earth will be affected by Change the verb form
leads
advesity
.
Correct your spelling
obesity
Finally
, I think we shall stand out to protect our earth, whatever the animals
and plants. It is becasue
we all have to Correct your spelling
because
relay
on Correct your spelling
rely
animals
to get the
food. Our Correct article usage
apply
furture
would be in our Correct your spelling
future
hand
.Fix the agreement mistake
hands
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coherence cohesion
The essay needs a clear introduction that presents the topic and a conclusion that summarizes the main points and states your opinion. The structure should be more logical with clear linkages between ideas.
task achievement
Ensure that you fully address all parts of the task by discussing both views and giving a clear opinion. Expand your ideas and support them with specific examples or evidence.
Your opinion
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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?