Human activities have negative effects on the plant and animal species. Some people think it is too late to do anything about this problem. Others believe that effective measures can be taken to improve this question. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people
thinks
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think
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the ecosystem may be
adverse
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more adverse
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than before
due to
industrial development. The others think
opposite
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the opposite
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and hope to restore the
enviromential
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environment
. Both sides of points of view
is
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are
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discussed in the following passage. First of all, the
enviroment
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environment
we live
on
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in on
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earth including all
livings
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living
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, species
in
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of
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animals
and plants are suffering
to
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from
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pollution.
Human
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Humans
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made
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make
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a vast amount of
watse
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waste
water
gas and water for our living
such
as driving a car, making
a
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apply
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cloths
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clothes
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and constructing a home. All these activities produce much of the pollutants
such
as carbon dioxide, toxic gas and
waste water
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wastewater
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with heavy metals. If living
animals
absorbs
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absorb
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these toxic
materals
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materials
,
it
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they
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can be passed to the next
dominent
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dominant
in the
live
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life
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cycle.
Finally
, we all have to intake
porsioned
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portioned
poisoned
food. That would not be reversed.
On the other hand
, many
peolple
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people
were willing to take a
precationary
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precautionary
measure to stop the pollutant
emit
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emitted
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from our human activities. As in the international carbon reduction agreement signed by many
counties
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countries
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such
as England, USA and Canada. They want to reduce
the
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apply
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carbon
emission
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emissions
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in order to
mitogate
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mitigate
the speed of green
house
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greenhouse
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effect. That can
be greatly descend
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greatly descend
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the trend which
lead
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leads
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to sea water level uprising. Many species on earth will be affected by
advesity
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obesity
.
Finally
, I think we shall stand out to protect our earth, whatever the
animals
and plants. It is
becasue
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because
we all have to
relay
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rely
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on
animals
to get
the
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apply
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food. Our
furture
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future
would be in our
hand
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hands
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.
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coherence cohesion
The essay needs a clear introduction that presents the topic and a conclusion that summarizes the main points and states your opinion. The structure should be more logical with clear linkages between ideas.
task achievement
Ensure that you fully address all parts of the task by discussing both views and giving a clear opinion. Expand your ideas and support them with specific examples or evidence.

Your opinion

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