Technology has brought so many changes that modern lifestyle are completely different from the way people lived in the past. Do you think the positive effects of technology outweigh its disadvantages?

In modern societies, concerning the issue of
technology
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development leads to significant changes in the current way of life,
people
hold different views.
Although
this
trend
provides both positive and negative
impact
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, in my perspective the benefits are far more than the disadvantages. On the one hand, there are several reasons to explain why technological progress is beneficial. One of them is that citizens in big metropolises or rural areas obviously approach education better than in the past and have more numerous learning opportunities for all.
For instance
, with the booming of
Covid-19
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COVID-19
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in 2019, the government enforced social distancing measures, resulting in children unable to attend school and adults transitioning to remote work. At that time, with technological growth the production of applications
such
as
zoom
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, google
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and Google
meeting
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… allows
people
to connect together and continue
study
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or
work
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as usual. Another benefit is that
this
trend
enhances
people
’s quality of life which helps
people
be convenient, accessible and comfortable. In
this
day and
ages
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,
people
can discover
the
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information about the products in an e-commerce platform to purchase and receive them
to
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in
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their
home
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in one hour.
On the other hand
, in my
opinion
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this
matter has a more deleterious impact. First and foremost, in my point of
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view
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views
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views,
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this
trend
brings some negative impact, which is
people
's health issues
such
as young
people
tend to have a sedentary lifestyle. That leads to numerous diseases of overweight, bone and joint diseases
as a result
of
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financial
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burden
to provide
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and
pay
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paying
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for public health. In summary,
it is clear that
citizens need to be careful of both
positive
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and negative consequences of the
trend
of taking advantage of the technology progress.
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