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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts illustrate the sources of
police
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the police
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 budget and its allocation in one British area in 2017 and 2018.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 there are
three
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 categories of income for
police
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 budget with
total
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the total
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amount
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 of
money
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, in
million
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pounds
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, in the table, having the largest
amount
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 of
money
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 in National Government in both years, in
million
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pounds
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. Notably, the pie charts consist of
three
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 segments, having the biggest proportions of wages for officers and staff. Turning to the details, there are
three
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 categories of the table with the total sum of
money
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, namely ‘National Government’, ‘Local Taxes’ and ‘Other sources’, where two out of
three
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 items show the highest
amount
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 of
money
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. To be specific, the most
amount
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 of
money
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 came from the first item, which was the highest in both years, representing a slight increase up to 177.8
million
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pounds
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 in 2018. As for the second category, it had the largest difference in the given period, which was 11.1
million
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pounds
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.
Furthermore
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, the
last
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 category had
insignificant
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 rise, which was 38.5
million
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pounds
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 in the latter year. Summing up all
three
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 categories, there was a slight rise
by
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 13.9
million
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pounds
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 in 2018.
According to
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 the pie charts, there are
three
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 segments, where the highest one belongs to the wages of police employees in 2017 and 2018, showing 75% and 69%, respectively. When ‘Buildings and transport’ remained unchanged in 2018, having 17%, ‘Technology’ had a marked rise
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 6%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words three, amount, money, million, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fiscal allocations
  • Revenue streams
  • Budgetary oversight
  • Expenditure
  • Financial appropriation
  • Government grants
  • Local taxation
  • Operational costs
  • Capital investment
  • Public safety
  • Crime prevention
  • Community policing
  • Resource allocation
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Budgetary constraints
  • Fiscal year
  • Fund disbursement
  • Budget deficit/surplus
  • Trend analysis
  • Financial sustainability
  • Law enforcement funding
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