The diagram below shows how rocks are created and destroyed in the rock cycle

The diagram below shows how rocks are created and destroyed in the rock cycle
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gives information about the process of how
rocks
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are created and destroyed. The first
cycle
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is that when
rock
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erodes into sand and stones, it
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a crushed sediment. The sediment
it self
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will transformed into 3 types of
rock
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which is
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sedimentary
rock
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, metamorphic
rock
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and igneous
rock
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. The second
cycle
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is that when sedimentary
rocks
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are faced with high pressure and temperature, sedimentary
rocks
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turns
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into metamorphic
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. When the
metamorphics
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rock
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melted into magma and the cooling
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, that's when igneous
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were built. The third
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is that after the sedimentary, metamorphic and igneous
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were
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formed under the surface, it will gradually
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to the surface of the earth and repeat the
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from square one. In conclusion, there are 3
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cycle
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that happened in the
rock
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cycle
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. The first one is the erosion of
rock
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that will
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the creation of sediment and there are 3 types of
rock
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that were built.
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