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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.
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the bar charts compare the
number
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 of UK
graduates
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 and
postgraduates
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 who chose other options over a full-time career after finishing college in 2008.
overall
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, those who continued their education had the highest significant amount in both groups,
whereas
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 the voluntary job had the least popularity.
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, the
number
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 of
graduates
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 was significantly higher than the
postgraduates
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.
according to
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graduates
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, the majority of educators who continued their studies were around 30.000. followed by, the
number
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 of students who chose part-time work stood at second 17.735,
while
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 that for unemployment was lower by a narrow margin(16.235 to be continued,
further
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 study was popular among
postgraduates
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 as well, at a
number
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 of 2.725, and that for part-time work ranked lower by
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 amount of approximately 200 individuals. for
postgraduates
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, unemployment and voluntary work accounted for 1.625 and 345, respectively, which were measured relatively a tenth as low as
graduates
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, graduates, postgraduates with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Graduate
  • Postgraduate
  • Full-time work
  • Further education
  • Part-time work
  • Unemployment
  • Volunteering
  • Traveling
  • Gap year
  • Career progression
  • Job market
  • Transition
  • Academic life
  • Professional sphere
  • Economic factors
  • Social factors
  • Financial crisis
  • Long-term impact
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