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pie chart about difference in population three age groups in italy and yemene between 2000 and 2050

The pie chart illustrates the proportional differences between
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age
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groups
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 in Yemen and Italy in 2000 and 2050.
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, both populations reported the majority to be young and adult
age
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groups
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 in the past,
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, Italy
predicted
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 to have a significant increase in older
people
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 percentage by 2050.
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, in 2000, the majority of the
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 in Yemen
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50.1% was in the 0-14
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 group.
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, those aged between 15-59-years-old formed around 46.3% of the
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. The lowest rate was for the
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 group 60+ years with only 3.6% of the
people
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.
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, in Italy, the percentage of
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 aged between 15-
59-years-old
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59 years old
 was higher at 61.6% and formed the vast majority of the
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.
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, lower percentages were recorded for both the 0-14 and 60+
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groups
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, at 14.3% and 24.1% each, respectively. It can be observed that in 2000, Yemen’s
population
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 was younger than the one in Italy. It is expected that in 2050, Yemen will experience a significant increase in the 15–59 and 60+
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groups
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, to 57.3% and 5.7% each, respectively.
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,
people
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 aged
0-14-years-old
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0-14 years old
 will fall marginally to 37.0%. Meanwhile, in Italy, the 0-14 and 15-59
age
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groups
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 will decline substantially, the former to 11.5% and the latter to 46.2%.
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,
people
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 aged 60+ will double the number and peak at 42.3% in 2050.

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