The table below describes the number of employees and factories in England and Wales from 1851 to 1901. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The table below illustrates the total amount of male and female workers who worked in

factories

for 50 years

moreover

, the data for the workers is for two nations.

Overall

, the whole number of men who were employed at the

factories

was more than the

overall

amount of women who

also

worked during the period from 1851 to 1901. From 1851 to 1871 the number of gents who provided services in

factories

were

Correct subject-verb agreement

was

show examples

a lot

than

Correct word choice

higher than

show examples

the ladies who

also

took part in industries during that period.

Besides

that, for both the guys and girls their amount continued to increase after every ten years for more than decades

also

the

factories

sum increased too.

In addition

, the total of males started to decrease from 1881 up to 1901

furthermore

this

also

applied to females as their

attendence

Correct your spelling

attendance

dropped but, the grand total of

factories

did not

fell

Wrong verb form

fall

show examples

after a long period of time it continued to rise.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words factories with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.

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7Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

155 words

7.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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