The table below describes the number of employees and factories in England and Wales from 1851 to 1901. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The table below describes the number of employees and factories in England and Wales from 1851 to 1901.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The table below illustrates the total amount of male and female workers who worked in
factories
for 50 years
moreover
, the data for the workers is for two nations.
Overall
, the whole number of men who were employed at the
factories
was more than the
overall
amount of women who
also
worked during the period from 1851 to 1901. From 1851 to 1871 the number of gents who provided services in
factories
were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was
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a lot
than
Correct word choice
higher than
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the ladies who
also
took part in industries during that period.
Besides
that, for both the guys and girls their amount continued to increase after every ten years for more than decades
also
the
factories
sum increased too.
In addition
, the total of males started to decrease from 1881 up to 1901
furthermore
,
this
also
applied to females as their
attendence
Correct your spelling
attendance
dropped but, the grand total of
factories
did not
fell
Wrong verb form
fall
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after a long period of time it continued to rise.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, overall".
Vocabulary: Replace the words factories with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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