Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social prblems as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statements?

Foreigners
are basically a person who
dont
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don't
have
a the
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local citizenship , if
i
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I
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were to simplify, it is a
person
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people
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whose not belong to a place or
country
. they
are
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usually
came
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come
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up seeking
for
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apply
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a
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job vacancies
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job
vacancies , holidays ,studies and so on.
in
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spectrum
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the spectrum
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of communicating , they commonly have
problem
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problems
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to communicate
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communicating
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with the native people. but
in
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on
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other
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the other
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side, there
is
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a lot of
foreigners
are
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who are
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capable
to speak
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of speaking
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eloquently and
have
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having
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a
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an
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intimate
relation
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relationship
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with the local people. We all
knew
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know
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that,
to learn
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learning
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a foreign language isn't that easy and
need
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needs
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amend of time to master it. At some
point
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point,
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i
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I
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agree with the statement that it will
caused
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cause
be caused
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a lot of problems especially if they are coming for
job
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the job
a job
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. there will always be a gap between
of
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apply
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the locals and the
foreigners
. But
doesn't
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that doesn't
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mean that
foreigners
can't have a good
relation
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relationship
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with the
local
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locals
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, In order to reduce the gap between the locals and
foreigners
, there must be a
standart
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standard
for
a
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foreigners
a foreigner
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foreigners
if they are seeking for
job
or study ,
instance
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for instance
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of
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apply
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IELTS test for the
standarization
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standardization
of
english
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English
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, there is some certain amount of score that must be fulfilled to study or work in some
country
especially
country
where
english
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is the main language. to summarize,
foreigners
are
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a person
the person
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person
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people
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whose
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who
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not
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do not
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belong
from
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to
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some
country
. there
is
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are
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several
reason
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reasons
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why they became
foreigners
, first because they seeking for
job
,
and
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the second one is
education
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for education
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, and the
last
one is just for holiday. I
agreed
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agree
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that the major problem for
the
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apply
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foreigners
are they
have
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apply
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struggle to engage with the local people and to communicate with
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their partner
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partner
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partners
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during work time which
it
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apply
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will caused
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causes
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a lot of problems. and
thats
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that's
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why
standarizations
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standardisation
are
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is
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needed.
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