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In the past, most employed people went to a place of work to do their jobs. These days, more and more people are choosing to work from home. What are the reasons for this change? is this a positive or a negative development?

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In comparison, in the past, most workers went to
work
 to do their jobs,
while
 nowadays, more and more people are choosing to
work
 from
home
. It is taught with a positive
development
 to keep mentally healthier and have a time efficiency manageable,
while
on the other hand
, it has a negative impact
such
 as lack of
productivity
.
This
 essay will discuss the reasons for
this
 change including what both are positive or negative developments. The one and foremost reason why
this
 concept changes is because of the high human demand in terms of needs. Take for one example, the outcomes rising unpredictably lead to workers to produce in more and more huge amounts, at that moment when the worker cannot achieve the target, it is perpetual to bring at
home
 to have done. It will absolutely bring positive
development
 to increase the
productivity
 during the
home
 activity and might have a benefit to use a
wide-range
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 of creativity to solve the problem. The workforce can reduce from
home
 and
keep
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the
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mentally healthier by doing some calm relaxation
such
 as meditation and/or gathering with relatives. On one hand, it can be
negative
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development
due to
 the fact that it can
be led
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as
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 a lack of
productivity
whereas
 the workers inability to manage their schedule in the middle of their hustle culture. Through the positive
development
 that has been offered above, sometimes they rely on the duties
and
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causing the failure in production
at the end
.
On the other hand
, the negative
development
 comes from the addictive
behavior
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 of taking out responsibility and procrastinating their
work
. In conclusion,
it is clear that
 more people are choosing
work
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 from
home
 with some considerations
such
 as keeping a healthy mind and easy to manage
the
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a
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 time schedule can be a positive
development
. But it can be potentially damaging as a
work
 disaster if the worker is trapped in
lack
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a lack
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 of
productivity
.
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task response
Address the essay prompt directly, providing a clear opinion on whether the development is positive or negative.
task response
Clarify your stances with more specific examples and ensure you provide clear and in-depth explanation for each point.
coherence cohesion
Enhance the logical flow of information by improving transitions between sentences and paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Argument should be structured in a manner where each paragraph maintains a clear main idea, supporting it consistently throughout.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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