The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart given illustrates the proportion of world
illiteracy
by
region
and by
gender
for
one
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a
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year
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one-year
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period.
Overall
, the highest number of world
illiteracy
was dominated by
female
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the female
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gender
all around the world,
and
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apply
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followed by
male
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the male
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gender
where it was the lowest.
To begin
with,
female
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the female
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gender
was
Verb problem
had
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the highest
for
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apply
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illiteracy
rates
in several
region
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regions
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.
First,
South
Asia
was the first ranked with 55
percent
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per cent
show examples
and
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apply
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followed by
Arab
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the Arab
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States in
second ranked
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second-ranked
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with approximately 52
percent
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per cent
show examples
number of
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apply
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illiteracy
rates
. After that, Sub-Sahara Africa was
in
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apply
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third ranked
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third-ranked
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with about 48
percent
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per cent
show examples
.
Lastly
, several
region
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regions
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which are East
Asia
,
Latin
American
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America
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, and Develop
Countries
were followed for the
third
last
ranked where East Asian female
gender
was only about 20
percent
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per cent
show examples
,
Latin
American with 13
percent
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per cent
show examples
and the
last
is
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apply
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Developed
Countries
with about less than 5
percent
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per cent
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in
number
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a number
the number
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of
illiteracy
rates
.
On the other hand
,
male
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the male
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gender
in South
Asia
become
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became
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the highest with a little bit 35
percent
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per cent
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in
illiteracy
rates
.
It followed
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Followed
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by
Sub Saharan
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Sub-Saharan
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Africa in the second with a little bit 30
percent
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per cent
show examples
while
Arab
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the Arab
show examples
States
was
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were
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the
third
with less than 30
percent
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per cent
show examples
.
Moreover
, the
third
region
were
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was
show examples
become the
third
last
ranked
which
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apply
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are East
Asia
,
Latin
America, and Developed
Countries
where each got about 10
percent
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per cent
show examples
for
the
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apply
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Latin
American
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America
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, 8
percent
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per cent
show examples
for
the
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apply
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East
Asia
, and the lowest was Developed
Countries
with 1
percent
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per cent
show examples
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words illiteracy, region, gender, rates, asia, percent, third, latin, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Illiteracy rates
  • Region
  • Gender disparity
  • Bar chart
  • Estimated
  • Summarise
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Analyzing
  • Discrepancies
  • Significant
  • Pronounced
  • Speculation
  • Male
  • Female
  • Global perspective
  • Literacy
  • Educational attainment
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Cultural influences
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