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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
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The line graph illustrates the average
of
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apply
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prices
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price
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changing
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 of
copper
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, nickel, and zinc in 2014.
According to
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 what is presented in the graph,
it is clear that
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prices
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is varying
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vary
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 every month. The
copper
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were
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apply
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hit a low
to
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of
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 -3 in June.
Whereas
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copper
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 and nickel we’re started by decreasing
prices
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, zinc
was increasing
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increased
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 from January to February.
Then
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 all of them were fluctuating up and down till June.
then
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 they grew up and remained steady
to
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until
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 October. They slightly
rising
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rose
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 from November.
To conclude
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, the
prices
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 of
copper
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, nickel, and zinc are changing rapidly every month.

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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words prices, copper with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly change
  • prices of metals
  • trend
  • spike
  • fluctuation
  • increase
  • decrease
  • sharp rise
  • sharp fall
  • stability
  • volatility
  • data points
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • external factors
  • influences
  • market dynamics
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