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In the modern world there is a movement away from written exams to more practical assessments discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this trend.

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In the modern days,
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exams
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 out between two
types
, practical or written
exams
. Both
types
 have their advantages and disadvantages. I am here to discuss
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each
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 and how they benefit
students
. On one hand,
exams
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 on written type tend to put more burden and stress on
students
. Having them cramp all of the textbook knowledge and being tested on the ones that occur on the examination. On the positive side,
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 would learn the material more thoroughly, learning every single topic to understand everything
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 on
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theoretical
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, written
exams
 would be more compatible.
On the other hand
,
exams
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 on practical type tend to make
students
 more familiar
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 the topic. Having
students
 be more familiar with the material
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 a more thorough understanding
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 the topic. On the negative side,
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 would neglect the textbook knowledge and focus more on how they would
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 the practical exam. In majors that
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 on experiments, practical
exams
 would be more compatible. In conclusion, both
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 in different
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 of
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,
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 on the
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 of study. Neither one of them can be
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Coherence & Cohesion
The essay has a weak logical structure that needs to be greatly improved for increased clarity of argument and better reader comprehension.
Coherence & Cohesion
There is an attempt to include an introduction and conclusion, but they need to be more clearly defined and effective in framing the essay's main points and findings.
Coherence & Cohesion
Main points are mentioned but not adequately supported with either detailed explanations or specific examples. Enhance the essay by expanding on these points with more developed reasoning and relevant examples.
Task Achievement
The response to the task only partially fulfills the requirements. It lacks a clear and comprehensive analysis of the advantages and disadvantages of written versus practical exams.
Task Achievement
Your ideas are not sufficiently clear or comprehensive, and they seem underdeveloped. To improve, outline your points in a more detailed manner, ensuring each is effectively explained and contributes to the overall argument or discussion.
Task Achievement
The essay would benefit from the inclusion of relevant and specific real-world examples to illustrate the advantages and disadvantages discussed. This will add depth to your argument and make the essay more persuasive.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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