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You have not seen a close friend for a very long time. You also still have a few of your friends belonging that were left at your house the last time she visited. In your letter include: •Why you are writing •What you’ve been doing since you last spoke together •Apologize for still having the items and ask how you can return them

#close #friend #time #friends #house #•why #•what #you’ve #•apologize #items
Dear friend, I miss you! How have you been? I haven’t seen you
from
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for
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 quite
sometime
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some time
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. I still remember the
last
 time you visited what an amazing time we spent together, wish we get a chance
gain
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again
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 to relive those moments. I’m writing to you to let you know that you forgot some stuff at my place. Do you remember your blue jacket which you wore
on
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to
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 the concert? That’s with me.
Also
, I
also
 have your bag which
have
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has
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few
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a few
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 toiletries items and some cosmetic stuff. I know you have a lot of cosmetics. I am sure you didn’t need
them
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what you have left at my place. Well, I am eager to tell you that after you went, I joined
swimming
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the swimming
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 classes I was talking to you about. It’s been a week and I am really enjoying it. I
also
 started watching
Netflix
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the Netflix
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 series -Money
heist
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Heist
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, it is
such
 an awesome series,
I
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and I
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would suggest you
to
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watch
as
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it as
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 well. I apologize for not writing earlier as I was
catch
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catching
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 up with some office work.
However
, I found your belongings in my closet
while
 keeping my stuff and thought of giving you a heads-up. Let me know how can I send you these items. Looking forward to
hear
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 from you! Best Wishes, Tanya
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greeting and closing
Ensure you include an appropriate greeting and sign-off for informal letters, as this helps establish a friendly tone.
single idea per paragraph
Make sure to organize your letter into clear paragraphs, each containing a single main idea, to improve readability and coherence.
complete response
While you have attempted to address all parts of the prompt, there is room for improvement in fully developing each point, such as elaborating more on why you are returning the items or suggesting specific ways to return them.
suitable writing tone
Maintain an informal, friendly tone throughout the letter appropriate to writing to a close friend, but be careful with the tone to ensure it remains respectful and considerate.
logical structure
Pay attention to the logical flow of information and ensure a clear progression of ideas from one paragraph to the next.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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