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The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in different parts of the world. Summer use the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and male comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in different parts of the world. Summer use the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and male comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart
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illustrates
 the proportion increase in average
property
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prices
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 in Algeria, China and Argentina from 2007 to 2010.
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, the percentage growth in average
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prices
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 in China increased gradually over time
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 it saw a noticeable drop in Algeria. The proportion increase in average
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 values in Algeria was just above 6% in 2007 and
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 declined gradually to just over 3% in 2009 before falling slightly to around 3% over a year. The percentage growth in average
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prices
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 in China was about 2% in the beginning and
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 fraction doubled by 2008 before climbing modestly to over 6% over two years. In Argentina, the proportion increase in average
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prices
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 varied between just under 5% and just over 1% throughout the period.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words property, prices with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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