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Some say that news has no connection with most people's life and it is waste of time for most of us to read newspapers and watch television news programs. Do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
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 day and age, it is a common belief that  watching the
news
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 is less common these days so some
people
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 think reading newspapers or watching the
news
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 is a waste of time.
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, I firmly believe that watching
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news
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 has a great influence on each person. I will shed light on my opinion in the following essay.  On the one hand,
News
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 is a part of helping
people
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 become aware and help them know more about society.
First,
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news
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 helps provide the latest and fastest
information
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 to help
readers
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 better understand the world and social, economic and educational issues.
For example
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, during the
covid 19
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 pandemic,
news
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 provided data related to the pandemic to help
readers
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 better understand it.
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,
news
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also
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 helps
people
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 understand important issues and participate in social exchanges.
On the other hand
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,
Although
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news
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 provides
information
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 about society, it can spread false
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. Providing false
news
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 can affect society as inaccurate
news
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 can influence
readers
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' decisions, especially in fields
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 as health, economics, and politics
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In addition
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, it
also
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 makes
readers
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 lose trust in
news
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 and it can cause social and economic consequences, especially when false
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 affects the decisions of businesses and governments.
Besides
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, if
news
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 often contains inaccurate
information
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,
readers
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 may lose trust in
information
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 and media sources and pose a challenge to
information
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 security.  
To sum up
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, Reading newspapers and watching
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news
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 can help
people
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 understand more, but
people
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 should find reputable
news
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 sites to have higher reliability to avoid reading false
information
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.
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task achievement
You should provide more detailed and specific examples to support your ideas. General statements are often less convincing than those substantiated with concrete details or data.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, but the body paragraphs could be better structured. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea and a series of supporting sentences that link logically to each other.
coherence cohesion
To improve coherence, make sure to use various linking phrases and discourse markers to show the relationship between ideas.
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