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The graph below shows the annual visitor spend for visitors to New Zealand from 5 countries for the years 1996 - 2014

The graph below shows the annual visitor spend for visitors to New Zealand from 5 countries for the years 1996 - 2014
#visitor #visitors #zealand #countries #years
The line graph
provide
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provides
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 information about the
amount
 of annual
visitor
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visitors
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spend
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spent
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 for visitours to New Zealand from
fifth
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apply
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various countries
over
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around
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 the world between 1996 and 2014.
Overall
, the
number of
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apply
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the
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apply
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expenditure
 for
that
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those
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 countries was
constans
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constant
 with Australia
was
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apply
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continously
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continuously
 leading from 1996 to 2014
while
 China
became
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had
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 the lowest
amount
 of annual
visitor
spend
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spending
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 for
visitors
 to
Newzealand
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New Zealand
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 from 1996 to 2014.
Firstly
, the
amount
 of the annual
visitors
spend
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spent
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for
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on
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 Australian
visitors
 was the highest
comparing
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compared
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 with others, in 1996 the
expenditure
of
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on
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Austraian
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Australian
visitors
 was 1000 NZS and
following
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followed
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 by USA
visitors
 in the second
large
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largest
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. In
contras
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contrast
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, China
was
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had
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 the lowest
amount
 of
expenditure
eventhough
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even though
 in 2002 the UK
is
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had
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 the lowest
expenditure
 since
reduction
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the reduction
a reduction
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 of the
expenditure
 for UK
visitor
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visitors
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.
Secondly
, the UK
visitor
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visitors
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 and the
Japan
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Japanese
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visitors
 started
in
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with
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 the same
amount
 of
the
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apply
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expenditure
 which is 500 NSZ.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, visitor, expenditure, visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual expenditure
  • tourism revenue
  • spending trends
  • economic impact
  • visitor spend
  • tourism sector
  • peak spending
  • fluctuations
  • incline/decline in spending
  • monetary contribution
  • tourist demographics
  • economic conditions
  • tourism campaigns
  • statistical analysis
  • data interpretation
  • fiscal year
  • extrapolate data
  • spending patterns
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