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You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine.In your letter correct the information in the article Explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information Suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

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Dear Sir, I hope
this
 letter finds you helpful.I recently read an article in an international travel magazine published in
the
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july
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 2023
that is
 incorrect with
information
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the information
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 that you provided.
Issue
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 about the
town
that
is
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belongs to erode.As a resident of a
town
,I am writing
this
 letter to bring your attention to
this
 matter. The
town
 Gobi is located in the area of
namakal
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 is incorrect.During
world
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 war-I
gobi
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the gobi
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located
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 in
the
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coimbatore
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.After
that
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 it's joined with Erode.Erode
was became
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 a district after
war
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the war
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.The arch
has
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 built during the
civil war
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.It is located in the centre of the
town
 of
gobi
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.You can verify it from the local authority of that place. The important thing is to provide correct information is essential to
public
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.
An
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 article read by many followers
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that
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who are reading regularly.So if one error occurs
also
 affects
truthness
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 of
address
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 of that place.It may carry
a knowledge
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 to
public
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. In
this
 situation,I believe that you have to rewrite the magazine and
also
 you have to republish the specified article without error.I am
thankfull
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 to you about the read my letter at
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 right time. Thanking you, Best Regards,
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that the introduction clearly states the purpose of the letter. Each paragraph should contain a single topic or idea.
coherence cohesion
Your letter must have a clear logical sequence with appropriate transitional phrases to ensure the reader can follow the argument easily.
task achievement
The task was to correct information, explain importance, and suggest actions. These need to be clearly addressed and developed.
task achievement
Use polite and formal language throughout the letter to maintain a suitable tone for the communication with an editor.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Rectify
  • Misrepresentation
  • Tourism
  • Editor
  • Credibility
  • Accuracy
  • Local heritage
  • Fact-checking
  • Repercussions
  • Counteractive measures
  • Publishing ethics
  • Clarification
  • Factual error
  • Misconception
  • Authenticity
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