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some people believe that the higher a product is priced, the more likely people will buy it. To what extent does price influence potential buyers? what other factors affect people to buy a produce?

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Goods are constantly used by humans around.
People
 generally believe that once a
product
 is expensive , more
people
 will be attracted to it .
This
 essay will discuss the extent to which
prices
 affect the choice of
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potential
 consumers and other factors that affect individual
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decisions
. In my opinion , I
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completely
 agree that
prices
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 the
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decision
 making of consumers.
Prices
 of goods
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 an important role in buyers decision.
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 generally believe once
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 expensive it has the tendency to be quality . A quality
product
 tends to
last
 longer which
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the
 choice of a buyer easy especially when being indecisive. Another factor that plays an
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important
 role in
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 of a.
product
 is its popularity .Many
people
 will rather purchase a very
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 familiar
product
 because they are aware of its brand .
For example
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 of
people
 would rather purchase
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 shoe brand because they are sure of the name rather than a nameless brand . Another point to consider is the reviews of a
product
 . Customers tend to check the review of a
product
 they are not familiar with in other to get a second opinion before buying a
product
 .Since rating has been a good way
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 knowing whether a good is good or not , it is an
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important
 tool that supports the review of a
product
. The more the price , the more
people
 are likely going to
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purchase
 the goods.
This
 essay has discussed the degree
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 which
prices
 are influential and I believe
this
 is entirely true because higher
prices
 are
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generally
 attracted by humans.
Also
, it can be seen how
others
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 factors
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 an
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important
 role
such
 as reviews and popularity.
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introduction
Your introduction provides a general overview of the topic, but it lacks a clear thesis statement outlining your main arguments. It is essential to include a precise thesis to guide the reader through your essay.
body
You have touched on the key points required by the question, but your main points lack depth and specific examples. Elaborate on your ideas and provide concrete instances to illustrate your arguments.
coherence cohesion
While you have presented some logical progression of ideas, the transitions between points can be smoother, and you should aim for more varied sentence structures and cohesive devices.
language
Be more attentive to typographical errors and ensure correct grammar usage throughout the essay. Consistent accuracy contributes significantly to the clarity of expression.
conclusion
Try to develop a stronger conclusion that restates your thesis and main points, commenting succinctly on their implications or providing a final perspective on the topic.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Consumer Psychology
  • Market Dynamics
  • Prestige Goods
  • Exclusivity
  • Perceived Value
  • Luxury Items
  • Brand Loyalty
  • Socio-Economic Status
  • Affordability
  • Peer Pressure
  • Product Differentiation
  • Psychological Pricing
  • Consumption Patterns
  • Quality Assurance
  • Target Market
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