The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar chart depicts information about how some households spent their income per week in one particular nation in 1968 and 2018. All in all, most
of
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families
spent
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their budget on food, leisure and housing rather than
others
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other
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goods. Getting back to the details,
while
in 1968 the vast majority of households spent their budget on food
for
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almost 40
percent
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, they
have
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same
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the same
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interest
spending
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in spending
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on housing and clothing
for
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about 10
percent
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.
However
,
while
spending on fuel and power have least spent merely 7
percent
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, others have the same percentage for around less than 10
percent
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.
On the other hand
, in 2018 most
of
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families outlayed money on leisure rather than on housing by 3
percent
. Meanwhile, expenditure on food and transport accounted for more and less than 15
percent
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respectively as
oppossed
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opposed
to
footware
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footwear
, fuel, and personal goods which were merely 5
percent
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.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • spending patterns
  • allocated
  • weekly income
  • significant changes
  • essential items
  • food
  • housing
  • clothing
  • leisure
  • communication
  • increase
  • decrease
  • twofold rise
  • substantial increase
  • quadrupling
  • declined
  • food and drink
  • slight increase
  • prioritizing
  • necessities
  • transitioned
  • portio
  • non-essential items
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