The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar chart depicts information about how some households spent their income per week in one particular nation in 1968 and 2018. All in all, most
of
families Change preposition
apply
spent
their budget on food, leisure and housing rather than Wrong verb form
spend
others
goods.
Getting back to the details, Correct quantifier usage
other
while
in 1968 the vast majority of households spent their budget on food for
almost 40 Change preposition
apply
percent
, they Change the spelling
per cent
have
Wrong verb form
had
same
interest Correct article usage
the same
spending
on housing and clothing Change preposition
in spending
for
about 10 Change preposition
apply
percent
. Change the spelling
per cent
However
, while
spending on fuel and power have least spent merely 7 percent
, others have the same percentage for around less than 10 Change the spelling
per cent
percent
.
Change the spelling
per cent
On the other hand
, in 2018 most of
families outlayed money on leisure rather than on housing by 3 Change preposition
apply
percent
. Meanwhile, expenditure on food and transport accounted for more and less than 15 percent
respectively as Change the spelling
per cent
oppossed
to Correct your spelling
opposed
footware
, fuel, and personal goods which were merely 5 Correct your spelling
footwear
percent
.Change the spelling
per cent
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