why people must be more sensetive about environment and sonsider pollution effects

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today's
todays
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today's
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world environment getting polluted day by day and individuals are not aware
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that pollution will bring
varieties
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illness First of all, Consuming all
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natural
habitat sources
are
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causing environmental degradation.
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, nature stopped producing new
biodiversty
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biodiversity
. Deforestation decreases green energy
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potential
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provoke
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people
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health.
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every tree that
cutted
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by
people
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, turns out apperance of new
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diseases
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addition
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using
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extra cars emits poisoned gasses, so tackling
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issue undeniable
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.
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, there is
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another big risk which is urban sprawl and
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causes
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ecosystem
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also
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polluts biodiversty
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pollutes biodiversity
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, over-utilization
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as building new industrial areas,new cars,buildings, and
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more combat
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natural areas, and affects
comunity
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community
respiration. When
people
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respirate they get all poisoned air
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of fresh air,
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, society
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to face
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many unknown
illness
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. To protect our nature,
government
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the government
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should implement new
ragulatory standarts
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regulatory standards
which protect
indivudals
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individuals
and
environment
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the environment
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.
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, some countries
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many companies to use renewable energies like sun energy,
wind
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and wind
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energy that
limits
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limit
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carbon footprint. Using sustainable energies
lessen
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lessens
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emissions and
combastion
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combustion
compassion
which protects from
pollutions
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pollution
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.
Government
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has to ban
usage
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the usage
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of non-biodegradable sources.
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,
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the earth,
people
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are the cause of all of
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deforestation and pollution. We may reduce the effects of
this
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utilization by using and offering new renewable energies which is crucial to have
better
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life. As a human-
bening
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being
, we should have changed our mindset to be aware
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that
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nature is a living habitat
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coherence
Each paragraph should have one main idea supported by detailed explanation and examples. Avoid general statements and strive to present specific details to strengthen your argument.
task response
Ensure you fully address the task by discussing not only the environmental issues but also elaborating on why people must be more sensitive to these issues. Include more specific examples and implications of not being sensitive to environmental concerns.

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