In many Western countries, there are an increasing number of couples choosing to have no children. What are the advantages and disadvantages to the couples having no children.
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countries,
couples
to have no kids
. This
essay will explain the advantages and disadvantages to
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of
couples
chossing
not to have Correct your spelling
choosing
kids
.
There are many advantages in
having Change preposition
to
kids
. First,
joy and fun because when couples
have kidsthey
are going to feel happy all of the time. Correct your spelling
kids they
Couples
will learn to give love and share a smile with them. Seconed
, when Correct your spelling
Second
couples
have kids
thier
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their
life
will be orgnized
and will sit for the next day. As everyone knows that Correct your spelling
organised
kids
life
has a special treatmeant
. Correct your spelling
treatment
For example
, s;eeping early or eating healthy food. When couples
have kids
they will know the value of family and gatherings. Most of the time couples
and their kids
are going to sit and talk or eat togather
. Correct your spelling
together
Finally
, kids
can be people
best Change noun form
people's
friend
with their parents. Fix the agreement mistake
friends
For example
, to go shopping togather
.
There are many Correct your spelling
together
diadvantges
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advantages
disadvantages
in
having Change preposition
to
kids
. First,
which is the most important is to waste money. As
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Couples
couples
see that having kids
can be wasting
money Wrong verb form
a waste of
by
buying food or needs. Change preposition
in
Seconed
, a Correct your spelling
Second
hug
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huge
responsibality
to deal with Correct your spelling
responsibility
kids
. Not everycouples
knows how to deal with Correct your spelling
every couples
kids
. On top of that most couples
nowadays needs
tutoring to help them with Correct subject-verb agreement
need
rasing
a child. Correct your spelling
raising
Finally
family problems with having kids
. Sometimes couples
get bored when they have kids
so they leave the other parnter
. Correct your spelling
partner
In addition
, couples
most of the time work so they just get exhauted
with all of the work that they Correct your spelling
exhausted
did
. In Wrong verb form
do
another
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another word
other words
words
it is hard to Add a comma
words,
comnind
career Correct your spelling
combine
commend
life
and kids
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kids'
kid's
life
.
In conclustion
, it Correct your spelling
conclusion
obvise
to see that the world with Correct your spelling
obvious
kids
. Also
, the advantages and disadvantages to have
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of having
child
.Add an article
a child
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