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Many educators believe that international exchange trips are beneficial for students. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give you opinion and include any relevent example

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Educational materials play an important role in the progress of a country. In
this
 regard, the usefulness of international exchange trips
have
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 been a matter of debate. I reckon they are beneficial for
students
 and improving
students
' creativity
as well as
 their responsibility regarding their society are some of their advantages for the
students
.
Firstly
, they level up
students
' innovations. Most
of
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students
 are highly likely to
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in
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 a classic family
followed
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 local beliefs.
For example
, in many religious cities, teenagers are trained with the church's materials so they may stay away from wine. Traveling to other countries makes them think out of
box
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 and gain new experiences.
As a result
, they will become more creative in the future.
Secondly
, living abroad helps
students
 to become more responsible. A student living in a developed country has no idea about
a
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life in developing countries or countries with low
level
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 of liberty.
For instance
, if a student from
Sweeden
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 travels to Iraq, he would know how
fortune
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 he is.
As a consequence
, he is willing to protect his community against any
extrem
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extreme
 belief.
Therefore
, he will contribute to the freedom
in
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 his country in the future. In conclusion, I believe
internaitonal
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international
 trips can lead to many effective results. Not only do they help
students
 to become more innovative, but
also
students
 will become responsible
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 for their social values
such
 as liberty.
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task achievement
You have addressed the question and presented a clear opinion which is good, but the essay would benefit from a more developed introduction and conclusion to better frame your arguments.
task achievement
The main ideas are relevant, but some are not fully developed or explored in depth. Aim to fully elaborate on your ideas and provide more detailed examples to support your points for greater clarity.
coherence cohesion
The logical structure of your essay is adequate, but transitions between ideas could be smoother. Use a wider range of cohesive devices to link ideas within and across paragraphs more effectively.
coherence cohesion
Specific examples are good, but they can be more effectively tied to the main argument by explaining how they directly support your point. Provide a deeper analysis of the examples to enhance the argument.

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