the diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purpose. summarize the information, and make comparison. write at least 150 words.

the diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purpose. summarize the information, and make comparison. write at least 150 words.
The illustrations demonstrate how
cement
and concrete are produced in order to use them for building purposes.
Overall
,
cement
and concrete generations are a 7 stage, man-made,
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linear
process
starting with limestone and clay
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being added to produce
cement
and ending with concrete production. First of all, limestone and clay are
being
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added into a crusher machine to generate
powder
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of these raw
materials
and
this
power is mixed in a mixer and conducted to a rotating heater for
heating
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process
. After the heating
process
, the heated product is converted to
cement
with the help of a grinder and
then
it is put into bags. Following that, four concrete
materials
are put into a concrete mixer to mix together. Gravel, small stones, is the major component of the mixture with half of the total raw
materials
and
this
followed
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by sand with 15% of the mixture. The remaining
materials
,
cement
and water, are added with 15% and a tenth of the total raw
materials
respectively. After the mixing
process
, concrete is produced as a final product.
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