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Some people believe that students should study at schools are better than studying in groups. However, others argue that students study at schools are better than they study on their owns. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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There has been a pervasive debate on the way students
study
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. Some individuals think studying at school is better than group
study
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.
Contrastingly
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, other
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 studying at
schools
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 is better than self-
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.
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, I find myself standing tall with the former viewpoint on collaborative learning with peers to foster new ideas, improve communication and enhance
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 comprehension. In the section
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 essay shall propagate both approaches of
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 pattern. To emphasize, studying independently can
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 bring a lot of advantages to an individual. Studying independently can allow one to gain
knowledge
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 of a topic at their own pace and focus on the areas that are challenging or interesting.
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 can help student empower themselves to have more control and
knowledge
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 in the area and help to enhance their skill.
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, one of my peers at college was weak in mathematics. To improve her
knowledge
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 and skill in that area she used to do self-
study
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 which has benefitted her to improve her skill set in the subject.
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, studying with peers can be beneficial too.
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,
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 can provide different ideas and viewpoints for the topics which can be difficult to understand on their own. Despite of
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, it can
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 enable them to become good friend thereby paving a better way for their future integration into society.
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, it is good to
study
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 independently but something it can be advantageous to have collaborative learning which will not only help in
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 but can be beneficial in other ways too.
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coherence cohesion
You should ensure a clear progression in your essay with logical sequencing of ideas. Introduction and conclusion should not only be present but also be clearly reflective of the main topic, providing a concise summary of the key points.
task achievement
It is important to fully address all parts of the task. Expand on your main ideas, provide pertinent examples where necessary, and ensure that your opinion is clear throughout the essay, especially if the question requires you to discuss both views and give your opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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