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You recently organised an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for launch. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter say what the participants liked about the hotel explain why they were unhappy about the food suggest what the manager should do to improve the food in the future Write at least 150 words.

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Dear Sir or Madam I would like to thank you for your support in hosting our meeting at your hotel
last
 Saturday. Sunshine
hotel
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Hotel
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 which
located
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is located
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 in
district
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District
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 1 was one of the best
choice
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choices
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 for arranging
workshop
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workshops
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 or meeting with
a
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apply
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great service
but
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and
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 great finger food quality.
According to
 our
participants
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participant's
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feedbacks
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feedback
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 that was not exactly what they expected. We liked the
cozy
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cosy
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 meeting room and everything about the hotel, including its cleanliness, fresh air, large lounge with comfort sofa and high-speed internet service.
Although
 the meeting was run all day long, your
staffs
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 always be ready to support any trouble devices happened.
However
, the
fingers
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 food that we were served
that
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was not good quality as some of our participants were not happy about it. The
skewers
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 meat was not cooked properly and it tasted chewy than our expectation. The fruits, especially
strawberry
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the strawberry
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 on top of
sponge
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the sponge
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 cake
was
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were
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to
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too
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 ripe and
smell
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smelled
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 rotten. I would like to ask you to
double check
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double-check
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 with your chef about food quality before serving them and you might
to
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prepare
a small gifts
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a small gift
small gifts
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such
 as
package
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a package
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 of tea and cookies
to
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for
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 our
participant
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participants
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 for the apologies to them. I wish you a good day and hope
you
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that you will consider my suggestions. Yours faithfully, My Bui
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph contains a single, clear idea and use cohesive devices to enhance the logical flow of the letter.
task achievement
While the response is complete and the tone is mostly suitable, ensure that all aspects of the task are covered uniformly with sufficient detail and formality.
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