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You are due to move into a rented apartment next month but you will not be able to because you have some problems. Write a letter to the landlord. In your letter -Explain your situation -Describe your problems -Tell him when you think you can move in.

#move #apartment #month #landlord #-explain #situation #-describe #-tell
Dear Madina, I hope you
in
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 a good situation today. My name is Samantha,
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and who
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who
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I
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 booked your
room
 in August
last
 month.
Due to
 some issue in my
office
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office,
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 I
decide
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 to stay in
the
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town until the next 2 months. I already booked your
room
 for one single
room
 in September. Moving
further
, I cannot attend to Maldives in September. I must
to
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finish my job first after that I will move to Maldives. I selected to represent my office
to
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presentation
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a presentation
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a
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project
will
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 be held in Manila until next month
then
 I must
to
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finish a report.
Therefore
, I will take 2 months to still stay in Papaya.
However
, I don't want to cancel my booking
room
 because it is certain that I will come to Manila on 31st October. If there is no objection, I will
to
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move-in
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on
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in
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 the next 2 months. On
this
epistle
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 I really apologize
of
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for
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this
 inconvenience. I hope you will understand
this
 situation. Looking
foward
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forward
 to your positive response. Thank you
for
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 advance
and
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your consideration. Yours Sincerely, Samantha
Submitted by ru.kabiru.biru on

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coherence cohesion
Ensure the letter has a clear introduction, development, and conclusion. The progression of ideas can be improved by better organizing the content.
coherence cohesion
Include a proper formal greeting and sign-off to align with the expectations of a formal letter.
coherence cohesion
Separate different ideas into clear distinct paragraphs for better readability and structure.
task achievement
While the task is mostly achieved, be sure to directly address all bullet points in the prompt for a higher score.
task achievement
Maintain a formal and polite tone throughout the letter to enhance the overall quality of the writing.
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