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You are a member of an organisation which meets regularly at a particular restaurant. The most recent meal you had there was not satisfactory.

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Dear Sir, I am writing to complain about the poor quality of meals that were served in your restaurant on our previous visit. As you know, my colleagues and I frequently meet in your restaurant, but we were disappointed with the food and service we received at
this
 time. We thought of trying a new
dish
 and
order
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 chicken pasta. There was a new member of our team, and she was excited to try it but after eating the first bite we realized that there was excessive salt and the chicken was not fresh. I informed the waiter, and he replaced the
dish
 but unfortunately, the new
dish
 still had the same taste as the previous one, but the waiter refused to take it back and started arguing with us. I hope you can settle
this
 matter by checking carefully the quality
dish
 before serving and making sure the staff behave in
polite
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 and welcoming manner to the customers. I trust
this
 problem will improve. Only
then
 are we concerned
to come
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about coming
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 back to your restaurant
.
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 Yours sincerely, Krys
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