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the responsibility for the protection of the environment is by a transnationa organiztaion or every country.

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The responsibility for the protection of
the
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mother nature is by
privte
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private
organization
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organizations
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 or every nation.
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,
this
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about
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the explanations of the capability
for
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of
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 the protection
ecosystem
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should be
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 every nation
such
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 as doing
collaborate
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activities
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 and making
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regulation
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regulations
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. Looking for more details, there are several
activities
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 for states collaborating
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ecosystem
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on ecosystem
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program
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programs
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.
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, the
government
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 and local
NGO
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NGOs
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 encourage society to follow
volluntering
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volunteering
activities
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.
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, the target of
partiticipans
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participants
participant
 comes from
people
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 who care
with
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about
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ecosystem
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the ecosystem
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 or
people
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 who doing
envoironmental
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environmental
study
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studies
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.
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, make yearly
activities
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 for
people
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 who
caring
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care about
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mother nature
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Mother Nature
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.
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,
activities
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likely
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one
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for one
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 week in the biggest cities,
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people
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 who have private transportation
are using
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 public
transfortation
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transportation
during
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for
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 seven days every
years
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.
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,
people
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 are doing
campaign
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campaigns
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 for reducing plastic waste.
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, the habitat of
campaign
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are
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 regularly
speak
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 up in
public
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the public
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area
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, so it will
be encourage
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people
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 to aware.
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, there are some pros
effects
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and effects
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for
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of
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 doing
proctection
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protection
 of
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ecosystem
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the ecosystem
an ecosystem
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 for doing
collaborate
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activities
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 by the country.
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, the
government
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who
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 regulated on
ecosystem
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 ways created
regulation
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, application and installation.
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, it is conducting for society to follow the rules.
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, the
government
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 should
be
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punistment
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punishment
punishments
 for
people
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 who
didn’t
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don’t
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 follow the rules.
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, the oil
company
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companies
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 in rural areas
who
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that
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 unfollow the
regulation
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 likely unreforest
are
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to
payment
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fee
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for
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to
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 the local authority. In sum, the payment fee will be one of
best
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the best
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 ways for society to
following
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follow
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relagulation
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regulation
regulations
. In conclusion, the responsibility for the
carry on
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 of
the
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apply
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mother nature
are
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is
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 by country.
However
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,
the
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individuals have
responsibility
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a responsibility
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 for care the environment are
followed
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following
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the
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activities
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 and
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regulation
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regulations
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government
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.

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task achievement
The essay lacks clarity in its argument structure and does not articulate a thesis statement effectively. It is essential to have a clear introduction with a thesis statement that directly addresses the topic. Each paragraph should have a clear topic sentence and the conclusion should summarize the essay's main points without adding new information.
coherence cohesion
There is noticeable repetition and lack of variety in sentence structures, which hinders the flow of information. To improve, use a range of cohesive devices and ensure each paragraph flows logically to the next. Furthermore, work on varying sentence types and lengths to create a more engaging and coherent essay.
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