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Many people use distance learning programs to study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the benefit as much as attending college or university. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Most people tend to get online lessons for their
studies
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. Some argue that it is not as helpful as participating in physical classes. I
supported
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to
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distance
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 learning because it saves
time
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 and money. The main disadvantage of online learning is practical knowledge is not included in the digital learning platforms.
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, some lessons attached practical part of the syllabus and home environment are not facilitated with equipment
,
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 and infrastructures.
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 students might lose the key component of the subject.
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, Science subject has many laboratory periods and it has
plethora
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 of chemicals and utensils to perform experiments and tests. But, usually, these things are domestically not available.
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, classroom
studies
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 provide some benefits for
studies
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.
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, online
studies
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 save
time
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 and money.
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, if participating in classroom lessons
essential
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 to go to that place away from home, and it takes
time
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 and cost to reach.
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, transport interference included traffic and the cost of fuel. As an example, many universities and popular academic centres are located in crowded city areas
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 impacts transportation.
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, zoom learning is a very convenient way to acquire knowledge.
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 is because learners are able to participate comfortably
with
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while
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 sitting on a sofa or bed and without concern about the attire. Eventually, saved
time
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 and cost can spent
the
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 other important things in their education and it will help to acquire good results.
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, world
high ranked
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 universities provide
distance
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 learning for students.
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, more students have decided to choose
distance
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 learning rather than face-to-face
studies
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. In conclusion, in
this
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 contemporary era, many people are engaging in
distance
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 education
instead
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 of attending
university
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 or academic centres. It
is
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does
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 not
providing
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practical
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a practical
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 part but more
easy
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 to participate because it saves money and
time
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.

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task achievement
Your essay responds to the task only partially. You have covered one side of the argument more than the other, lacking a balanced view on the topic. Detailed development of both sides of the argument is necessary to achieve a higher score. An examiner expects an equal discussion or a clear opinion addressing all parts of the prompt throughout the essay.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a basic logical structure, but the introduction and conclusion are underdeveloped. A clear thesis statement in the introduction and a restated position in the conclusion are required for a higher score. Cohesion and coherence are about more than structure; they're about linking ideas and paragraphs smoothly, showing clear progression in your argument. Use of cohesive devices and paragraphing could be improved to guide the reader through your discussion and avoid generalizations without support.
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