Many people use distance learning programs to study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the benefit as much as attending college or university. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Most people tend to get online lessons for their
studies
. Some argue that it is not as helpful as participating in physical classes. I supported
Wrong verb form
support
to
Fix the infinitive
apply
distance
learning because it saves time
and money.
The main disadvantage of online learning is practical knowledge is not included in the digital learning platforms. Furthermore
, some lessons attached practical part of the syllabus and home environment are not facilitated with equipment,
and infrastructures. Remove the comma
apply
Then
students might lose the key component of the subject. For instance
, Science subject has many laboratory periods and it has plethora
of chemicals and utensils to perform experiments and tests. But, usually, these things are domestically not available. Add an article
a plethora
Thus
, classroom studies
provide some benefits for studies
.
However
, online studies
save time
and money. In other words
, if participating in classroom lessons essential
to go to that place away from home, and it takes Add a missing verb
is essential
time
and cost to reach. Moreover
, transport interference included traffic and the cost of fuel. As an example, many universities and popular academic centres are located in crowded city areas and
impacts transportation. Correct word choice
which
On the other hand
, zoom learning is a very convenient way to acquire knowledge. This
is because learners are able to participate comfortably with
sitting on a sofa or bed and without concern about the attire. Eventually, saved Change preposition
while
time
and cost can spent the
other important things in their education and it will help to acquire good results. Change preposition
on the
For instance
, world high ranked
universities provide Add a hyphen
high-ranked
distance
learning for students. Therefore
, more students have decided to choose distance
learning rather than face-to-face studies
.
In conclusion, in this
contemporary era, many people are engaging in distance
education instead
of attending university
or academic centres. It Fix the agreement mistake
universities
is
not Verb problem
does
providing
Wrong verb form
provide
practical
part but more Correct article usage
a practical
easy
to participate because it saves money and Replace the word
easier
time
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