The diagram shows how cheese is made
The diagram depicts the step-by-step process outlining the transformation of raw milk into
cheese
.
Overall
, cheese
-making is a linear, interconnected process consisting of nine stages. It commences with the mixture of raw materials and culminates with the sale of the product for consuming
.
Replace the word
consumption
Firstly
, bacteria as well as
enzymes are added to the raw milk. Thereafter
, the mixture undergoes solidification where it is transformed into curd. Then
the solidified curd is cut into small pieces. The tiny pieces are heated and drained prior to the addition of salt. Furthermore
, salt is added not only for flavour but also
to aid in the preservation of the produce.
Next,
the cheese
is shaped manually before fermentation can begin. Hereafter, the cheese
is fermented for approximately two months. Once the fermentation stage is complete, the cheese
is packaged. Finally
, the packed cheese
is distributed to stores for consumption purposes.Submitted by kellyanne.henney on
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