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The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by the UK residents in 1999. Summarize the information and make comparison. Write at least 150 words.

The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by the UK residents in 1999. Summarize the information and make comparison. Write at least 150 words.
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The line chart presents the total number of
people
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 who departed from and came to the
UK
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 between 1979 and 1999, and the bar graph gives information about the top five countries (France, Spain, USA, Greece, and Turkey) to visit by
UK
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 citizens in 1999.
Overall
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, the total figure of
people
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 who went abroad by
UK
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 residents has more number rather than foreign tourists who came to the
UK
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 for over 20 years. France was the most popular
country
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 to visit by
UK
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 citizens
while
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 Turkey was the smallest to spend in 1999. In 1979, approximately there were 12
million
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UK
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 individuals left the
country
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while
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 only about 10
million
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people
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 from outside the
UK
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 came to the
country
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. After that, there was an increase in
people
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 who went abroad up until 1985 at 20
million
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 and suddenly the figure rose dramatically, recorded at more than 50
million
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people
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 visiting another
country
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 in 1999. There was a similar pattern for foreigners to the
UK
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. Starting at 10
million
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 in 1979, it grew for the next 10 years to 20
million
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 before the trend expanded steadily until the end of the period at just before 30
million
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.
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, in 1999
UK
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 citizens chose France as their
favorite
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favourite
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country
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 to visit as the number stated around 11
million
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people
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for
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apply
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visitors from the
UK
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. In the
second,
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there were Spain at under 10
million
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. For the other three countries, all numbers were below 5
million
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 tourists. Started from the USA at about 4
million
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,
and
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followed by Greece and the smallest, Turkey at approximately 3.5 and 3
million
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people
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, uk, country, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • upward trend
  • consistent increase
  • sharp rise
  • gradual growth
  • outbound travel
  • inbound tourism
  • popular destination
  • significantly outstripped
  • gap widened
  • given period
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