The table below shows the age profilof tourist on backpacking holiday and the guided tours in New Zealand in 2005, and the pie chart gives the satisfaction rating of their stay. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and makecomparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the age profilof tourist on backpacking holiday and the guided tours in New Zealand in 2005, and the pie chart gives the satisfaction rating of their stay. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and makecomparisons where relevant.
The line graph depicts information about
radio
and television users in the United Kingdom in three months, from October to December 1992. The data in the graph is shown by the percentage of inhabitants in the UK from 4 years old during
TV
and
Radio
utilization in day and night
time
. By and large, it is ubiquitous that the majority of
people
in the UK preferred to watch
TV
rather than listen to
radio
Correct article usage
the radio
show examples
during
the
Correct determiner usage
that
show examples
period of
time
.
Moreover
, the television audiences at the
time
increased from afternoon to evening. Turning to the data in the graph
showing
Wrong verb form
shows
show examples
that the
preference
Replace the word
preferred
show examples
time
of
Change preposition
for
show examples
using
TV
and
radio
is fluctuated
Change to the active voice
fluctuates
fluctuated
show examples
during
Change preposition
over
show examples
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
time
. In the early morning, from 1 AM to 5 AM,
people
chose
Wrong verb form
choose
show examples
to watch
TV
calculating for a mere five
percent
Change the spelling
per cent
show examples
, even though it
Change the verb form
does
did
show examples
not show a huge difference
with
Change preposition
from
show examples
radio
Correct article usage
the radio
show examples
.
However
, from 7 AM to 13 PM, the percentage of
people
listening to the
radio
increased dramatically, beating (surpassing) the
TV
percentage accounting for under a mere five
percent
Change the spelling
per cent
show examples
at 5 AM to 25
percent
Change the spelling
per cent
show examples
at 9 AM.
Nevertheless
, at 13 PM, the presentation of
people
watching
TV
started to rise from 15
percent
Change the spelling
per cent
show examples
then
continued to increase until it peaked
approximately
Change preposition
at approximately
show examples
45
percent
Change the spelling
per cent
show examples
at 21 PM showing the highest presentation during the period of
time
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Vocabulary: Replace the words radio, tv, time, people, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.

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