The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two pie
chart
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provides
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an information
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regarding
proportion
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of marital status in
Australia
and Canada. Generally, the status of
marriage
are
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classified into six classes in Canada and five in
Australia
.
Firstly
, 53% of the
populations
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in Canada are separated but not divorced
while
only 1% of them are officially divorced.
However
, the number of married
populations
are
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only 29%, showing
significant
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populations
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difference between long-lasting
marriage
and separation.
In addition
, the
populations
of widows and never married people show the same percentages with just 7% and those two are followed by
populations
of
same sex
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marriage
with 3%.
Secondly
, In
Australia
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Australia,
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many couples have preserved their
marriage
as the married
populations
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dominated with 46%.
Whereas
the
seperated
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separated
population is slightly
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by 41% of
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the populations
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populations
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population
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and only 2% are officially divorced.
However
, there are no
same sex
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marriage
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marriages
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in
Australia
. The
populations
of the widows and singles are showing similar numbers with 6% and 5%
repectively
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respectively
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, marriage, populations with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • marital status
  • population
  • pie charts
  • percentage
  • categories
  • Married
  • Single
  • Divorced
  • Widowed
  • distribution
  • noticeable trends
  • comparison
  • significantly different
  • similarities
  • striking differences
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