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The table below gives information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in five countries in 2009. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The table below gives information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in five countries in 2009. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The table
provide
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provides
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 information about
salaries
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the salaries
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 of secondary or high school
educators
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 in various countries
such
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 as
Australia
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,Denmark,
Luxenbourg
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Luxembourg
,Japan and Korea in 2009.
Overall
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,
initial
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the initial
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salary
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 is the biggest
in
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for
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 Luxembourg
teachers
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 and the
least
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lowest
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 is
in
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for
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Australia
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Australian
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educators
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.
However
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,after 15 years
teachers
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 who live in Luxembourg are
leader
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leaders
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 in earning large
amount
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amounts
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 of money,
while
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 in Korea
as well as
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 in
Australia
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 tutors
earning
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 exactly the same.
To begin
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 with,Luxermbour
teachers
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 have the highest
salary
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in
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at
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begging
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beginning
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 of their work with its 80000 which is 35000 more compared with
educators
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 earning in Denmark.With regard to Japanese and Korean
teachers
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,their
salary
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 is 34000 and 30000 respectively.
Lastly
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,Australian tutors earn merely 2000 less than Korean
teachers
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.
Nevertheless
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,
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this
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the
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 statistics
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for
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of
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for
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educators'
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educators
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educators'
educator's
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earning
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earnings
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are
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is
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are
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 not the same after 15 years.Tutors from
Australia
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 who have already 15 years
working
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of working
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 experience in the workplace earn 48000 which is the same with Korean
teachers
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.In terms of
teachers
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 from Denmark and Japan,their
salary
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 is 54000 and 65000.
Finally
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,Luxembourg
teachers
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 earn 119000 which is 39000 more
comopared
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compared
 with
initial
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the initial
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salary
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.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words educators, australia, salary, teachers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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