The bar chart illustrates the percentage of how parents in a country spent time taking care of their children in the evening in 2022. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart illustrates the percentage of how parents in a country spent time taking care of their children in the evening in 2022. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart
show
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information about the proportion of certain
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activity
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activities
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that parents spent
for
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apply
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taking care of their
childern
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children
in the evening,
such
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as dressing,
homework
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doing homework
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, playing games and preparing for bed in 2022.
According to
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the chat,
father
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the father
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became
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the figures
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figures
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figure
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that spent less time in the evening with their
childern
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children
in the evening, yet
mother
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the mother
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reached the highest
rate
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comparing
others group
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other groups
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based on dressing and homework
activity
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even 2
others
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other activities
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activity
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had
highest
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the highest
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rate
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when both
parent
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parents
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spent together. The
percetage
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percentage
of
father
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fathers
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spent
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who spent
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time in the evening with their
childer
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children
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dropped about under 10% in every
activity
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,
wiith
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with
highest
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the highest
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rate
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that
father
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fathers
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spent was homework,
while
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mother
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mothers
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reached 50% and
collaboration
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the collaboration
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of both
parent
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parents
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slight
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slightly
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above 40%. The
least
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last
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activity
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that
mother
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mothers
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spent with their
childern
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children
was playing
game
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games
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(under 30%),
in contrast
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with both
parent
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parents
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spent together had 70% which is the highest
rate
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of spent time with family.
Moreover
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,
in
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apply
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dressing
activity
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got reverse from that.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words activity, rate with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • Percentage
  • Parents
  • Spent time
  • Taking care
  • Children
  • Evening
  • 2022
  • Summarise
  • Information
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Relevant
  • Patterns
  • Trends
  • Highest
  • Lowest
  • Activities
  • Gender
  • Conclusion
  • Findings
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