The bar chart below shows the hour per week that teenagers spend doing certain activities in Chester from 2002 to 2007

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The presented chart compares different types in terms of leisure time amongst teenagers in Chester during a period of 5

years

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between 2002 to 2007.

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, it is noticeable that over the

years

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children’s

interest

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interests

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had

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have

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changed.

While

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watching television was by far the most popular

acitivity

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activity

between them, bowling was the least one. It is

cleas

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clear

that there is a great distance between watching television with others. Regarding

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apply

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the figures, going to pubs/discos has increased in 6

years

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but the most change was

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2007 which reached around 18

hours

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from 8 in 2002.

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, shopping had a rising trend from

near

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nearly

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7 in 2002 to 15 in 2006 and

reamined

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remained

steady until 2007.

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although

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watching television had the highest rate among all interests with 25

hours

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per week in 2002 and 2003, it grew to its peak at about 38

hours

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in 2007.

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it is clear that

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doing homework and sport witnessed a decrease from 13 to 7 and 10 to 2 respectively.

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watching DVDs and playing bowling

flactuated

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fluctuated

fluctuate

during these

years

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, the rate of watching DVDs

get

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got

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to its start point around 10 and

bowing

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bowling

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was less

that

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than

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hours

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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.

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8
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

200 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

trends
compare and contrast
increase/decrease
time allocation
shifts in popularity
significant changes
cultural factors
technological advancements
social dynamics
implications
physical/mental health
social development
leisure activities
recreational
sedentary
engagement
interaction
steadily
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marginally
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