The map shows the public library 20 years ago and now. Compare and summarise the information in about 150 words.

The map shows the public library 20 years ago and now. Compare and summarise the information in about 150 words.
The given two maps compare
between
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the construction of a public
library
before
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two decades
and
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nowadays. From an
overall
perspective, it is noticeable that there are
a
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significant developments
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in the
library
. On the one hand, in the past, particularly 20 years ago, there were only four rooms with a few facilities.
In addition
, to be more
specified
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, on the north-east side of the
library
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there was a
room
namely, children’s books.
However
, in the
middel
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middle
, there was a zone for adult non-fiction books.
Whereas
, on the south-east
corner
, there was a space for a desk for questions and enquiries.
Moreover
, in the
center
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of the
library
, there was an area for tables and chairs.
Furthermore
, on the north-west
corner
, there was a
room
for digital games and under
this
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there was a zone for adult fiction books.
Also
, on the
south-west
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corner
, there was a reading
room
.
On the other hand
, nowadays,
a
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huge differences constructed
on
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the
library
such
as
,
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the children’s
room
which was located in the north-east of it replaced by a lecture
room
.
Moreover
, the desk which was situated on the button side of the map
replaced
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by a new café.
In addition
, the
children
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room
move
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into
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the other side of the map,
as well as
, the computer
room
transformed
to
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the
south-west
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southwest
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corner
of the
library
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition, moreover".
Vocabulary: Replace the words library, room, corner with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • evolve
  • renovation
  • infrastructure
  • amenities
  • state-of-the-art
  • landscape
  • pedestrian
  • augment
  • spatial
  • demolish
  • construct
  • accessibility
  • innovations
  • extensions
  • facade
  • environmental-friendly
  • urban development
  • public facility
  • modernize
  • technology integration
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