The pie charts below show the sources for UK tax revenue for last year and the total UK government spending for last year.

The pie charts below show the sources for UK tax revenue for last year and the total UK government spending for last year.
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pie charts give information about the
percentage
of
tax
revenue and total
government
spending in the UK for
last
year.
Overall
, it is obviously seen that
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analyzed year the highest
percentage
of
tax
revenue of the UK was income
tax
,
whereas
the lowest
percentage
made up
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at
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5% in business rates, fuel rates and council
tax
.
However
, the highest
figure
in total
government
spending was pensions, on the
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general
government
and transport was the lowest
of
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figure
. Getting back to the details in the UK income
tax
accounted -
28
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% ,
then
the second highest
percentage
was national insurance. The
figure
made up- 21%
all
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of the
tax
revenue,
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the lowest
figure
of
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business rates and council
tax
constituted only 5%. The
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tax
revenues were significantly more
,
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than 5%. It was others and
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tax
11% and 17% respectively. With
regarded
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to total
government
spending, the
figure
of
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pensions accounted
twenty
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,
then
next was health care. The
percentage
was 14%
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of the total
government
spending,
whereas
the lowest 3% was general
government
. The
percentage
of other spending and defence was the same only 7%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, tax, government, figure with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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