The map shows the public library 20 years ago and now. Compare and summarise the information in about 150 words.

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The map illustrates how the central public gallery was 20 years

back

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ago

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and how it is now.

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, the current gallery is more developed than the previous one and almost all buildings were reconstructed into something else.

Initially

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, it is seen clearly that the place for children's

books

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and Equity desk area that was used for serving

ticket

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tickets

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and receiving returned

books

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was demolished and constructed into

lecture

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a lecture

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room and cafe respectively.

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the

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adult fiction notebook place was left in place

in addition

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information

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the information

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desk and three

self service

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machines. In the

center

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centre

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of the library, the chairs and tables have been placed there for people to on, just immediately after entering.

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, it is observed that in the northwest, the map showed CDs, computer games and videos 20 years ago which were later

recotructed

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reconstructed

into children's fiction

books

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as well as

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an area for storytelling

together with

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sofas.

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today all reference

books

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shelf was renovated after

adult

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the adult

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fiction book section.

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, the room that was built

twinity

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twenty

years ago for reading newspapers and magazines, is now being used as

computer

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a computer

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room.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

Vocabulary: Replace the words books with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

184 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

evolve
renovation
infrastructure
amenities
state-of-the-art
landscape
pedestrian
augment
spatial
demolish
construct
accessibility
innovations
extensions
facade
environmental-friendly
urban development
public facility
modernize
technology integration

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