The map shows the public library 20 years ago and now. Compare and summarise the information in about 150 words.

The map shows the public library 20 years ago and now. Compare and summarise the information in about 150 words.
The map illustrates how the central public gallery was 20 years
back
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and how it is now.
Overall
, the current gallery is more developed than the previous one and almost all buildings were reconstructed into something else.
Initially
, it is seen clearly that the place for children's
books
and Equity desk area that was used for serving
ticket
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tickets
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and receiving returned
books
was demolished and constructed into
lecture
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a lecture
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room and cafe respectively.
However
,
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the
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adult fiction notebook place was left in place
in addition
to
information
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the information
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desk and three
self service
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machines. In the
center
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of the library, the chairs and tables have been placed there for people to on, just immediately after entering.
Furthermore
, it is observed that in the northwest, the map showed CDs, computer games and videos 20 years ago which were later
recotructed
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reconstructed
into children's fiction
books
as well as
an area for storytelling
together with
sofas.
Moreover
today all reference
books
shelf was renovated after
adult
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the adult
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fiction book section.
Lastly
, the room that was built
twinity
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twenty
years ago for reading newspapers and magazines, is now being used as
computer
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a computer
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room.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words books with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • evolve
  • renovation
  • infrastructure
  • amenities
  • state-of-the-art
  • landscape
  • pedestrian
  • augment
  • spatial
  • demolish
  • construct
  • accessibility
  • innovations
  • extensions
  • facade
  • environmental-friendly
  • urban development
  • public facility
  • modernize
  • technology integration
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