Some people believe that air travel should be restricted because it causes serious pollution and will use up the world’s resources. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays
air
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pollution is one of
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disaster
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on
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earth and some
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that
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travel
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restrictions
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a solution to battle the issue. I completely disagree with that statement and in
this
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essay will discuss the reasons. First of all,
air
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travel
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is not the major cause
for
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the
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air
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pollution and once prohibited flights would not be the answer.
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,
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of transport and road systems increased
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a number
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of vehicles on the road.
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,
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globalization more and more factories constructed. These reasons directly accelerated the problem and
air
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becomes hazardous for living beings. As an example, recently conducted research revealed that
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congested
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many factories and traffic has more polluted
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and
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has
certain
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type
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of hazardous. The main reason for
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with
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travel
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the most convenient transport method to
travel
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other
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countries.
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, most of the
people
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are working and studying overseas and
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many individuals tend to migrate abroad.
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, flying is the best way to reach long destinations. If restricted flights,
people
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will face many transportation issues without proper solutions.
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, sometimes
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weather
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an
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international
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services
cancelled
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temporarily,
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passengers many difficulties.
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,
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by
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should not be restricted. In conclusion, some
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group
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groups
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of
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make
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whether to
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whether to
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improve the quality of
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by restricting
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travel
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travels
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, but I do not agree
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of
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this
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due to
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flight
travel
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is the most easiest and reliable method to
travel
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through
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trough
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through
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countries.
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