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Band 2

Some people think that it is more important to plant trees in open areas of town and cities than to build more housing . To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The plans display the site of an airport present and whether it will look after
development
in
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next year.
Overall
, an airport
has been
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 wider than before
development
 which
is
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 there are many
gates
 for people. A passenger in the future will
looking
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look
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 for
sky
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a sky
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 train, not
walkway
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a walkway
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 anymore. There are many changes based on the maps. Now, only 8
gates
 for
passenger
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 to reach an airplane. But, in the future, there will be 18
gates
 after
development
, which
is
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 it will be easier
people
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. The
gates
is
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 divided
by
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into
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 two sides, and
each
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 side there will be 9
gates
. In the upfront, there will be an upgrade for departures and arrivals doors, and in
this
development
, there will be 2 doors
each
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 side, respectively. After we enter or leave the door, there will be many new places
such
 as bag drop, ATM, and car hire.
This
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 new places
is
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 not available before
development
. Shops
has
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 been added in the future, so people can go shopping, which is
this
 area is not in there.
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task achievement
Your essay does not address the given topic about the importance of planting trees versus building housing in cities. Instead, you've discussed the development of an airport, which is off-topic. To improve, ensure that your essay directly responds to the question by providing relevant arguments and examples related to the debate over urban greening and housing needs. You must make it clear that you understand the topic and provide a balanced view if you neither agree nor disagree, or else a strong position if you do.
coherence cohesion
The coherence and cohesion of your essay could be greatly improved. Your essay should have a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Each paragraph should have a central idea, preferably stated in a topic sentence, and the following sentences should elaborate on that idea. Logical connectors should be used to show the relationship between ideas, and there should be clear progression from one idea to the next. Work on developing your paragraphs and structuring your essay more clearly.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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