Some people think that the government should provide free education at every level. However, some say that individuals should pay for their university education.

Some people
of
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societies
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believe
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belive
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believe
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that every person
have
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to fund their college
education
nonetheless
some say that the
government
should not charge
cost
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for every
degree
this
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university should be free To commence,
this
statement will examine how
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issue affects
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aspect
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of
society
especially for
who
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those who
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are graduated from their
education
to college level, nowadays the reality that we are facing is the price of studying is too expensive,
therefore
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belive
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that is
not good for us because everyone has the opportunity to get
good
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education
.
For
instance
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we find a potential student in senior
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high school
highschool
highshool
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high
but he can not continue his college because of financial
problem
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and
that is
something very unfortunate And for the second statement which
talk
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about the
government
should not change
cost
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for every
degree
and
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I totally agree because
education
has
very
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essential role for a country,
education
will develop
society
and the
government
has a responsibility to give
the
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society
a good
education
.
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example
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if the
government
is irresponsible for
society
's
education
and
make
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a cost for every level of
education
, it will affect
on
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many people do not want to go to school and that will demolish the
education
circumstances especially and
society
for
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generally
To sum up
, I completely
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believe
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belive
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believe
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that free
education
is
responsibility
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for
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the
government
for every
degree
from elementary school to university and that will
affects
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a good result for
education
circumstances especially and develop
good
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society
generally
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