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Band 4

Some people think that the government should provide free education at every level. However, some say that individuals should pay for their university education.

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Some people
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societies
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society
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believe
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belive
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believe
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 that every person
have
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 to fund their college
education
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nonetheless
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 some say that the
government
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 should not charge
cost
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 for every
degree
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this
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degree
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and
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 university should be free To commence,
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different
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aspect
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 of
society
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 especially for
who
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 are graduated from their
education
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 to college level, nowadays the reality that we are facing is the price of studying is too expensive,
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belive
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that is
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 not good for us because everyone has the opportunity to get
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education
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.
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instance
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 we find a potential student in senior
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high school
highschool
highshool
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high
 but he can not continue his college because of financial
problem
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 and
that is
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 something very unfortunate And for the second statement which
talk
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 about the
government
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 should not change
cost
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the cost
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 for every
degree
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and
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I totally agree because
education
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 has
very
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 essential role for a country,
education
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 will develop
society
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 and the
government
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 has a responsibility to give
the
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apply
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society
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 a good
education
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.
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example
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 if the
government
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 is irresponsible for
society
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's
education
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 and
make
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makes
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 a cost for every level of
education
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, it will affect
on
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apply
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many people do not want to go to school and that will demolish the
education
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 circumstances especially and
society
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for
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generally
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, I completely
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believe
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belive
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believe
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 that free
education
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 is
responsibility
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the responsibility
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for
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of
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 the
government
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 for every
degree
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 from elementary school to university and that will
affects
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 a good result for
education
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 circumstances especially and develop
good
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society
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 generally
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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