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There is a problem in your street. Write a letter to the local town council explaining who you are, what the problem is and what you hope will be done about it.

#street #town #council #hope
Dear Sir or Madam, I hope
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 you well. I
wirting
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writing
this
 letter to tell you about
my
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 problem I had to face
on
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last
 Friday when I
work
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 at home . As you know, I am a payable officer in
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 team, so I have to work a
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lot on the
computer
 which the company gave
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to
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me. Unfortunately, the monitor of the
computer
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 not working anymore and I had to borrow my friend’s screen to finish my job
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 that, my
computer
 shows signs of running slower.
This
 problem is affecting the performance of my work. Given the current
cirumstances
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circumstances
, I hope
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 can buy
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me a new monitor or change the whole
computer
 for me,
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 will
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help
 me to
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solve
 the job quickly and effectively. Thank you for your time and consideration. Best regards, Ngoc Bao Nguyen
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Task Achievement
Ensure the letter's content strictly addresses the set topic, which is a problem in your street. The content provided is unrelated to the task prompt
Coherence and Cohesion
Employ a clear paragraph structure, with each paragraph presenting a single issue or point related to the topic. The letter should focus on the street problem as per the instructions, not personal work equipment issues.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use appropriate salutations and closings for formal letters. Avoid overly casual language, and ensure the closing is consistent with formal correspondence.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Local council, town hall, representative, official address
  • Infrastructure, amenities, public services
  • Road maintenance, potholes, resurfacing
  • Streetlight, illumination, lighting outage
  • Noise pollution, disturbance, decibel levels
  • Health hazards, safety concerns, risk assessment
  • Remedial action, corrective measures, enforcement
  • Communication, response, follow-up
  • Pertinent, urgent, pressing issue
  • Resolution, rectification, amelioration
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