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The line graph shows the number of books borrowed from four libraries in the mouths of June, July, August and September of

The line graph shows the number of books borrowed from four libraries in the mouths of June, July, August and September of
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The graph compares four libraries based on their number of borrowed
books
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 over a recorded period of time.
Overall
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, Church Mount, West Eaton and
Sutton
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Wood
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 show an increase from their initial numbers.
However
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,
Sutton
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Wood
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 witnessed a dramatic fall in August before rising again in September. In Ryselip, borrowed
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 are linearly decreasing from July to September. In June, 300
books
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 were borrowed from Ryselip, making it the most library that lent their
books
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 as Church Mount and West Eaton started at 50
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.
This
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 situation changed in July when
Sutton
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Wood
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 took over the first position by having roughly 275
books
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 taken for temporary use
while
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 Ryselip declined to 250
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.
Nonetheless
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, there was a sharp decrease in August because
Sutton
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Wood
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 only lent 100 of its
books
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. During
this
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 time, Church Monet and West Eaton notably inclined to respectively about 125 and 150
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. In September,
Sutton
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Wood
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 escalated again to 300 borrowed
books
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, making them the highest in the graph.
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