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More and more plastic waste is polluting cities, countrysides and oceans on the world. What problems does it cause? What are the solutions?

It is true that the amount of
plastic
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, that
make
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makes
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 pollution on land and water rise. There are a variety of possible. reasons for
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, but steps can definitely be taken to tackle the problem.       Nowadays
plastic
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 is one of the main
problem
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problems
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 for ecology. Items wich are made from
plastic
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 need a lot of time for decomposition and humanity
are
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is
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 not able to affect
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. Many wild
creaturs
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creatures
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 use
plastic
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, which lies in the soil, as food,
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cause
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causes
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 poisoning and risk of death. Extinction
create
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creates
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of
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apply
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any kind of animals
create
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creates
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 difficulties for
ecosystem
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the ecosystem
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 and
break
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breaks
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 the law of nature.
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example
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 several kinds of turtles in the USA die out because of pockets,
baloons
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balloons
 and bottles in the ocean.  
Situation
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The situation
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 with
plastic
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 can certainly be improved. Governments are able to motivate citizens to decrease
plastic
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 usage by exploiting social video for
public
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the public
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.
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, they can reduce
using
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the use of
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plastic
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 by helping manufacturers replace
plastic
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by
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with
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 more decomposing material.
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, usual bottles and pockets can be changed to glass bottles and paper pockets.        In conclusion,
plastic
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 continue to pollute
atmosphere
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the atmosphere
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 and ponds unless
application
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the application
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 of
plastic
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decrease
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decreases
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.

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Introduction & Conclusion
Ensure that the introduction provides a clear overview of the topics that will be discussed in the essay. The essay should avoid vague statements and strive to have a clear and purposeful thesis statement.
Supporting Main Points
Develop the main points with relevant, specific examples and explanations that clearly link to the overall argument or statement. Provide at least one clear example for each point made.
Logical Structure
Work on constructing clear and well-organised arguments. Each paragraph should contain one clear main idea, with subsequent sentences providing supporting details or development of that idea.
Task Achievement
Address all parts of the task. Ensure that clear solutions are presented along with the problems, and both are expanded upon adequately. Avoid merely stating problems and solutions without explaining how they interlink or the significance of each.
Coherence & Cohesion
Use a wider range of cohesive devices and paragraphing correctly to manage the organization of ideas. Ensure that ideas flow logically from one to the next, and that pronouns reference clearly defined nouns earlier in the text.
Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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