The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 - 2001.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 - 2001.
The given chart illustrates the percentage of purchased and rented
accomodation
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accommodation
in 2 countries
during
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1918 and 2001. It is interesting to note that
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the percentage
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of purchased
accomodation
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accommodation
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increased gradually over a given period of time.
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the popularity
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of rented housing decreased considerably over those years. At first sight
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clear that rented housing had its highest peak in 1981, which was almost 80%, respectively.
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contrast
to
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purchased accommodation
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had its lowest point, nearly at 25%.
According to
the data demonstrated household in purchased
accomodation
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accommodation
had positive results, especially between 1991 and 2001, reaching its highest point just under 80%.
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purchased housing,
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had
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lowest
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the lowest
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proportions (just over 30%) during those years.
To sum up
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the popularity
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of
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the two
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sections had
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over the course of time
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including the results in 1971
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they experienced a period of equality.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • tenancy
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • proportion
  • residence
  • dwelling
  • shift
  • transition
  • migration
  • fluctuate
  • stabilize
  • rise
  • fall
  • increase
  • decrease
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