The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 - 2001.
The given chart illustrates the percentage of purchased and rented
accomodation
in 2 countries Correct your spelling
accommodation
during
1918 and 2001.
It is interesting to note that Change preposition
between
percentage
of purchased Correct article usage
the percentage
accomodation
Correct your spelling
accommodation
had
increased gradually over a given period of time. Unnecessary verb
apply
Whereas
, popularity
of rented housing decreased considerably over those years.
At first sight Add an article
the popularity
its
clear that rented housing had its highest peak in 1981, which was almost 80%, respectively. Replace the word
it's
it is
By
contrast Change preposition
In
to
purchased accommodation Change preposition
apply
which
had its lowest point, nearly at 25%.
Correct pronoun usage
apply
According to
the data demonstrated household in purchased accomodation
had positive results, especially between 1991 and 2001, reaching its highest point just under 80%. Correct your spelling
accommodation
In contrast
with
purchased housing, Change preposition
apply
which
had Correct pronoun usage
apply
showed
Wrong verb form
shown
lowest
proportions (just over 30%) during those years.
Correct article usage
the lowest
To sum up
, popularity
of Add an article
the popularity
two
sections had Correct article usage
the two
been fluctuating
over the course of time Wrong verb form
fluctuated
not
including the results in 1971 Add the comma(s)
, not
where
they experienced a period of equality.Correct word choice
when
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