The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar charts compare
frequency
of different types of individuals in terms of education Add an article
the frequency
beside
the percentage of these people who Replace the word
besides
owe
a computer from 2002 to 2010.
Correct your spelling
own
Overall
, it is clear that
over these 8 years, the number of educated people in
different levels increased Change preposition
at
as well as
owning the computer.
Regarding to
the chart which illustrates the education ratio, in both years, people with Remove the preposition
apply
post graduate
Add a hyphen
post-graduate
qualification
accounted for the greatest group at 80% in 2002 and 100% in 2010, Fix the agreement mistake
qualifications
while
no high school diploma includes
the lowest part of Wrong verb form
included
the
society at about 15% and 45% in 2002 and 2010 respectively. It is noticeable that the trends throughout these 2 years were upward.
Correct article usage
apply
On the other hand
, it can be seen that the rate of poeple
who Correct your spelling
people
owe
Verb problem
owned
the
computer from 2002 to 2010 Correct article usage
a
had
gradually rose. Unnecessary verb
apply
While
in 2002, less that
60% of the society Correct word choice
than
enjoy
PC, Wrong verb form
enjoyed
this
figures
reached more than 70% in 2010.Fix the agreement mistake
figure
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