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The chart below gives information about Southland's main exports in 2000*20.., and future projections for 2025. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, anamake comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

The chart below gives information about Southland's main exports in 2000*20.., and future projections for 2025. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, anamake comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words
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The given bar chart illustrates the data about the three primary exports of Southland which were international tourism, dairy
products
 and meat
products
 respectively. It is given in a period of
years
 2000 and 2020, and the prediction for the future period is 2025.
Overall
 it can be seen that all those three exports witnessed a significant drop throughout the period of three
years
. It is
also
 worth noting that
while
 international tourism claimed a centre of popularity throughout these
years
, meat
products
 recorded a dramatic decrease. Taking a
further
 look into
years
Correct article usage
the years
show examples
 2000 and 2020. It is obvious that in 2000, dairy
products
 only accounted for nearly 7
billion
pounds
,
whereas
 in the
year
2020
Add a comma
2020,
show examples
this
 amount moderately increased from 7
billion
pounds
 to around 10
billion
pounds
.
This
 shift in dairy
products
 between these two
years
 was claimed to have the highest increasing proportion.
Furthermore
, in the
year
 2025, the projection was predicted to be at the average amount compared to the other two previous
years
 with the amount of approximately 9.5
billion
pounds
. Looking at the remaining exports in detail. Whilst international tourism recorded a slight rise in each given
year
 by an optimal value of 1
billion
pounds
, meat
products
 stood at the lowest position and evident an infinitesimal decline. Noticeably, the shift in each
year
also
 obtained an equitable value of around 500 million
pounds
 .
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words products, years, billion, pounds, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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