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The chart below gives information about Southland's main exports in 2000*20.., and future projections for 2025. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, anamake comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

The chart below gives information about Southland's main exports in 2000*20.., and future projections for 2025. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, anamake comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words
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The bar chart illustrates the primary exports in Southland (measured in
poundsterling
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pound sterling
) that took place in 2000, the ongoing 2024,
along with
 the prospective projections for 2025. Looking from a holistic perspective, except for dairy products, it can be seen that there is a constant increase and decline trend for global tourism and meat commodities, respectively.
Began
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 in 2000, foreign tourism
had
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contributed to the export activity in Southland with an amount of money worth 8
billion
. In the subsequent 24 years, it has grown by 1
billion
 and
predicted
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 to reach 10
billion
 in 2025.
On the contrary
, dairy goods seem to have
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a fluctuated
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fluctuated
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 trend over the selected three-time period. It has rocketed dramatically by 3
billion
 over a 24-year period, with the price registered at 10
billion
 in 2024.
While it
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 is likely estimated to go through
moderate
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a moderate
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 fall in 2025, with the approximate price settled at 9.5
billion
. In stark contrast to the other export components, meat commodities are the only element which shows
to
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began its contribution towards Southland's exports with just 6
billion
,
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 and expected to drop noticeably
until
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by
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 2025. It can be seen that the
decrease
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decreased
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 onset for meat goods took
gradual
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a gradual
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 change with the end price predicted to be recorded at 4
billion
.
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