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The chart below gives information about Southland's main exports in 2000*20.., and future projections for 2025. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, anamake comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about Southland's main exports in 2000*20.., and future projections for 2025. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, anamake comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the primary exports in Southland (measured in
poundsterling
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pound sterling
) that took place in 2000, the ongoing 2024,
along with
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 the prospective projections for 2025. Looking from a holistic perspective, except for dairy products, it can be seen that there is a constant increase and decline trend for global tourism and meat commodities, respectively.
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 in 2000, foreign tourism
had
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contributed to the export activity in Southland with an amount of money worth 8
billion
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. In the subsequent 24 years, it has grown by 1
billion
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 and
predicted
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 to reach 10
billion
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 in 2025.
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, dairy goods seem to have
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fluctuated
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 trend over the selected three-time period. It has rocketed dramatically by 3
billion
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 over a 24-year period, with the price registered at 10
billion
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 in 2024.
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 is likely estimated to go through
moderate
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 fall in 2025, with the approximate price settled at 9.5
billion
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. In stark contrast to the other export components, meat commodities are the only element which shows
to
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began its contribution towards Southland's exports with just 6
billion
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,
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 and expected to drop noticeably
until
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 2025. It can be seen that the
decrease
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 onset for meat goods took
gradual
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a gradual
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 change with the end price predicted to be recorded at 4
billion
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.
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