The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
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The presented line graph compares the amount of carbon dioxide produced by everyone in 4 different
country
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during 4 decades from 1967 to 2007.
Overall
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it is clear that
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while
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in
United
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the United
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Kingdom and
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Sweden
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Sweden,
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we see a great decrease in the
emmision
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emission
of CO2, in Italy and Portugal the trend is totally reversed.
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, in 2007,
Sweden
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and Italy reached an equal level. With regard to the figures illustrating UK and
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Sweden
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Sweden's
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consumption, in
UK
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the UK
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, the
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carbon dioxide was about 11 metric tones in 1967, which was the highest rate
amongest
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amongst
all countries , it gradually
delined
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declined
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to nearly 9 in 2007,
whereas
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, in
Sweden
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, the rate was 9 in 1967, and after reaching the peak point in 1977 at just over 10, there was a sharp fall onward until 2007 which met less than 6. Looking at the Italy and Portugal trend, it is noticeable that both countries experienced an upward
trand
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trend
from nearly 4 and 1 in 1967 to less than 8 and 6 in 2007 respectively. It is noticeable that in 2007
Sweden
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and Portugal
emmit
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emit
the same rate of carbon dioxide at just less than 6 metric
tones
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tonnes
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sweden with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon dioxide emissions
  • per person
  • United Kingdom
  • Sweden
  • Italy
  • Portugal
  • graph
  • compare
  • average
  • increase
  • decrease
  • trend
  • peak
  • decline
  • years
  • period
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